Kirbyfemur's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[LooopoooL]

Please please....

Make an expanded version. The beginning is nice and soft, and the lead up to that heavier section was sweet. But it felt like you just left us with only a snippet of awesome and then walked away.

This is excellently mixed it has a good amount of the spectrum covered and is well balanced.

This 22 second song has caught a good amount of my attention and it is still holding it, even after I'm done writing this review i might still listen to it a couple more times.

Honestly everything fits well together even the clash of styles doesn't make any sort of feeling of not belonging. This song is just exploding with potential.

And as sad as it may sound but this little loop has you added to my favs and the song, i just listened to your other songs as well. You've got a lot going for you, just need to expand upon what you've got and make the songs longer, though i know it's hard to keep song quality up with longer songs, but you can do it i think :3

cloverkid13 responds:

Thanks for the info, but you see I was making it and I thought it was wicked funny how it just hits twice then goes back to a calm melody =P But, yeah I should make a song that switches to and fro.

[Prelude No. 4 in Am]

Pretty, only a couple hiccups

I would say unless you expanded upon the empty space with the sounds of you fidgeting in front of the mic in the very beginning and make it an artistic part of this piece, i would try to cut it out of this.

I would say practice this a few more times cause there where a couple areas of hiccupage, but i only say this with love and with the hopes to help.

Maybe a couple parts where the you separate the high and low part with a melody that plays of it's own accord then a after a few beautiful measures of "solo" magic (I put quotes only because I don't mean like speed guitar solo, but more in the classical sense) bring the cording back in and either end it or repeat the beginning and then bring in another section then afterward the outro.

I hope this wasn't to confusing though. I liked it, you did a good job mixing it, and the quality is top notch. :3

Darkmaster603 responds:

I appreciate your generous score. I recorded this mostly so I wouldn't forget how it went, and wrote it in about 30 minutes, 25 minutes min-rehearsing it, and the last 5 were used to record and upload.

This was actually recorded directly, and I forgot to cut out the silence in the beginning, sorry :S

I write my pieces with the intention of them being solo performances, because I am a performing solo guitarist I can't rely on other instruments or anything like that.

Thanks for the review, I'll practice this a bit more and upload a better version.

[[S,J] Mixed Junkie]

Pretty damn good

Has a lot going for it, and a few things that could be touched upon or added.

As was mentioned before, the snare is a bit out of place and could use maybe a little more oomph. Otherwise the drums are amazing, and well varied.

The problem most people have with working around with NES/8-bit sounds is that they done have much of a tone and sort of suck it away from the other tones. Mess around with some sounds and give it a bit around the rather interesting bass part.

The bass gets a bit strange at a few areas, which is both good and bad. But it needs more sections where it's in the lower register and isn't jumping between low to high. Give us some bass man lol

Also it might be a good idea for legal reasons to mention that you used a sample from The Beastie Boys.

So give us something to go along with the bass, snare, and Beastie recognition, did i miss anything? Hmm.... The ending was great, but maybe like i said, make use of the bass as bass rather than the higher end sound and it willl be perfect =3

SmithCommaJohn responds:

Sample given credit. Snare hit intensified. Fixed up the bass.

I don't think I missed much, now did I? :D

[Mark The World]

Gah fuckin high pitched noise!

Hey i actually really like this. Has a nice soothing sound. The drums kinda grew on me, cause at first i wasn't sure about it, but i liked it more and more as i listened.

But i'm picking up a really high pitched frequency that appears at :51, 1:06, 1:52, 2:29, 2:43. While the ones around :51 aren't to bad, the others are rather ear pearching and they hurt, i actually just listened through and there are some more throughout, but they are harder to pinpoint. If possible fix these, cause it kinda hurts lol

FatKidWitAJetPak responds:

Yes it is, it is a pad I put in there actually thinking they might sound nice...

I have decided to leave them in for now, since most speakers dont seem to pick them up as that high of a frequency.

Are they really that bad? I think they ones at :51 and 1:06 are, along with 2:29 and 2:43 so I took those out, which was actually one note played on a pad. I decided to leave the others in though. Thanks for the help!

[Trips]

Pretty good

This song actually has some decent potential behind it i think. First of, it needs a beat overhaul. I know it's "Dance" but it needs some variation other than the one or two fast snare parts, maybe some kick variation here and there.

I'm not to fond of the actual synths you are using in a lot of your songs, but the composition is really good, but it needs a some more original sounding synths.

Otherwise this is a kick ass song =3

NeonEntity responds:

Thanks man :P
I made the lead synth for this song but i'll try to come up with new stuff.
Thanks for your advice.

[-RG- In a Teardrop]

I like it

It is a very simple but effective song. The section where it sounds like "Lux Aeterna" as you said could be worked on just a bit, since that sort of progression is a bit over used in a way. Maybe switch a couple of the notes of the melody and give it more oomph, i don't know if that makes esne but it's all i can think to say.

Also the drums felt a bit under-quality compared to the rest of the song, maybe find some higher quality drums, or maybe just better hi-hat and cymbol sounds cause they where a bit distracting.

Anyways liked it, and with a bit more tonal tweaking this could be even better =3

Raven-Guard responds:

"It is a very simple but effective song. The section where it sounds like "Lux Aeterna" as you said could be worked on just a bit, since that sort of progression is a bit over used in a way. Maybe switch a couple of the notes of the melody and give it more oomph, i don't know if that makes esne but it's all i can think to say."

I get what you mean, and i take full responsibility for the similarity in the melodies. I guess i've heard that song one time too many on the internet and got influenced. Ive been working on fixing around the melody a bit but that might take a while im horribly busy right now.

"Also the drums felt a bit under-quality compared to the rest of the song, maybe find some higher quality drums, or maybe just better hi-hat and cymbol sounds cause they where a bit distracting."

Yes, drum samples tend to come out as the underdog in quality as East West is way better in terms of sample quality, so when you put the instruments from EW and the drums from downloaded samples together, you get a drastic difference in quality. Unfortunately, our budget is a bit too low right now to go around buying every single EW plugin (although i can assure you we'd like too :D)

"Anyways liked it, and with a bit more tonal tweaking this could be even better =3"

Glad you liked it. Tonal tweaking is in progress xD

Tks for the review!
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Darklight17

[(RaC2010) These Dear Old Pipes]

So many lyrics, so little time!!

There seems to be a common theme within a lot of your song as far as tonal quality with your metal songs. The drums are very hard to hear, the vocals are a little difficult to distinguish with all of the sounds going and the effect you used on your voice. I think the bass sound you used sort of takes over some of the sounds and makes it slightly hollow. I like how the bagpipes fit with the song pretty well.

I think you might want to practice the vocal part a bit more, because it gets very of beat and a little distracting and sounds forced at times. And i know you seem to like that reverb kind of effect on your vocals, but they sort of ruin the sound of the rest of the song and i think it might be overpowering the rest of the song.

If you can get some of that eq stuff fixed i also think you can spread the lyrics out a bit more. Like between each section give a a little instrumental break then go into the next part, it'll give it more fluidity and make it easier to transition into the next lyrical sections.

Hopefully this helps you and doesn't discourage you, cause this has some really good potential to be a great song with the quality that the poem seems o be. =3

Pure-Metal-UTA responds:

A review! Hooray! reviews like these are hard to obtain for me :S
I honestly don't know how I would spread the lyrics out more without going way past the time limit... but from what I've seen from other people's songs, they've gone way past the time limit, so it might not be an issue.
I will get rid of the reverb in the vocals because I've started growing a distaste for them anyways.
I probably will redo the vocal part too because fuck it was extremely hard to growl that fast and manage to get all the words in.
The bass, it really sucks. I really hate the VSTi that I use fot this, and I haven't really looked for any better bass VSTis. Even on its own it sounds really hollow. But regarding it's overpowering, I'll have to see how much I lowered it by, I usually lower the bass by 5-7dB because of it's loudness.
The drums are a little troubling for me, because when I listen to the song with my headphones on, they are easily hearable, but when I listen to it on my amp (which I use as my computer speaker) it's harder to hear. Could that mean that my headphones are coloured?
It's good to know that the bagpipes are hearable. Can you hear the drones after the song starts? That's one thing I might need to fix. Recording the bagpipes was horrible. Since I only have one mic, I had to record the drones and the chanter seperately, and my lips were giving out too easily when I played the chanter, so I had to take it off the bag. I never want to do that again when recording bagpipes.

Thanks for the review, it's extremely appreciated!
I'll get to fixing that tomorrow after my music final.

[Problem,Officer?]

A bit inconsistant in sound, but fun

I liked the rather playful feeling of this song, lots of upbeat rhythm and melodies. But the big problem i have with this, is that you seem to be trying to use as many sounds as physically possible, and while it does add variety, it makes it seem like you're having trouble having good varied parts in single instruments.

It was fun, and you did do a good job on it. Good luck! =3

eatmeatleet responds:

Ok that's exactly what it is. TY for comment :D

[Childhood's Cave [Anya]]

Drums a little to...

Subtle in the beginning? I dunno, there isn't much to this, but but does what you said it did, calms. It has that sort of "awww okay, i get to rest now" type of thing from older video games, just with more realistic drums lol =3

EmperorCharlemagne responds:

Thanks for the comment on the drums... I guess I do have to raise the volume on them a little (didn't want to make them TOO prominent in this piece).

[Exquisite Corpse 1]

Fried chicken!!

Wow, we need do something like this more often, but maybe a few more rules to make it sound even more interesting and intricate. Like, there was a lot of effects going on that made this a bit muddy in sound, which for a bunch of pieced together parts it still sounded awesome. Maybe we could either limit, or even take away effects and see what we could make with pure instrumentation. =3

Rig responds:

Some instruments in the synth part are defined by their effects, though.