Kirbyfemur's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Oddball: Halloween 2011]

Liked it but..

There is a random high pitched noise that seems to happen every once and a while, and it is rather piercing...

Kreid responds:

Yeah I just noticed that, it's actually part of the BGM I think

[Dot Dot Dot - Animated]

THANK YOU!!

I laughed at the audio when i first heard it in the Audio Portal, and i'm still laughing now. My only real gripe would be that the music wasn't "Original" in the sense that you made it or that someone else made it here on newgrounds. But other then that it fit perfect. I would suggest bringing the volume down a smidge at the climax(s) of the song. Mainly to even things out, since it did get a little hard to hear the voice.

:3

RicePirate responds:

:3 I also was having an inner struggle about using O Fortuna, in fact, I went through the audio portal for remakes... there were a couple, but all techno (which I liked... but didn't fit the piece). DMac was epic, I needed epic music behind him :) (That said, go scout the Audio portal for awesome tunes! There are so many!)

[Kos Tape Arms]

Woo!

It's weren't to bad for a year old script. Though it does have it's issues here and there. You had a nice use of music (Trying not to sound biased since you did use my song lol), and the animation was pretty smooth for the most part, and will just need practice to get it better.

I think that you have a lot of potential to make some really great flashes, and hey you've already been apart of a flash that got front paged, so you've got exposure already, lucky you!!!

I would love to work with you again as far as providing musics go if you want. I mean that song didn't jump up in veiws or reviews, but it's still nice ya know? =3

OnionsXD responds:

Wow! Thanks for the extensive review! What I meant with indicating that it was a year old script was that NOW I can write so much better stuff. And I understand humor a lot better now!!

[Uzbekistan]

Cookies

Well... I'll be as nice as i can to this one.

The timing for the mouths where done fine, but i'd work on making them a bit more fluid and human like. I know it's difficult to animate so i wont rag on this too hard.

The jokes, well they where a little lame at parts but it had it's moments, but the part when they where talking about the cotton seemed to go off onto another tangent and i couldn't tell if they where talking about gold or cotton. Though the cookie thing was nice, though the timing of the joke could use a little bit of work.

Okay, now for fro. Well.... You're mic isn't the best of quality i read in another review, so i wont comment on that part. But it felt very robotic, and bored. like you didn't really want to be doing the voice acting of this. So i'd say work on your articulation, as well as accents. I don't want to sound mean, just wanting to be helpful...

Anyways, keep on trying =3

<(Review Request Crew)>

MonoFlauta responds:

Oks thanks a lot... fan of Kevin Bacon?
lol

Thanks for reviewing :P

[Blue Lotus]

A good start

Congrats on your 3rd by the way.
What it needs, is development of the characters. Give them a reason to love each other, rather than just love at first sight.

Maybe give the a rather large obstacle to overcome. Something like, they can't leave their flower, or they would wither away.

Or a diver takes the guy away(Or girl, i say guy just to give a change in heroic pace as far as what sex is the hero)

Or bring in another love intrest, and create a love triangle, and develope a story as to how the first two would end up together.

Or give us a good little love story, but one that tries to avoid using to many love cliches.

But give is people who we actually want to care for. Make us sad when they're sad, make us angry when they are angry. Pretty much, just give it as much emotion as you can =3

purefey responds:

I responded on the journal post! Thanks!

[My Sad Christmas 1999]

Haha wow

This is the first flash someone has used a song of mine in. I can say i'm pleasantly surprised.

The animation was pretty good. Was rather creepy, and well yeah a bit weird lol. There where a couple of sounds in it that seemed a bit too loud, like the sudden static sounds.

And though i loved that you used my song, it would be nice to have some warning. I don't mean i would have said no, it's just a nice gesture to the peoples you use the music from. =3

golfinho responds:

sorry for not warning, i dont waning because i donte speak english very well! but npw i say, thanks for your music and review!

[The Sculpture]

Very creepy

The build up to the point of the attack was done pretty good. The whole "Can only move when it isn't in direct eye contact" sounds like an interesting premise, but at the same time it's kind of, I don't know, I like the thought at the same time as not.

The animation is smooth, stuttery at times, but that more adds to the atmosphere of the movie.

One problem I see with this is that it doesn't get enough time to really develop any sort of character, well development. It just feels like it was a quick thrill, then just kind of died along with that guy.

I like it, and i hope my mean words aren't discouraging. I'm just trying to be helpful to ya. =3

-Review Request Club

PBass responds:

Heh, the stutteryness was due to me rushing, but it's good that it added to the mood for some people. The reason I didn't include any character development is because this was a quick short and I was killing the three guys who had the most screen time. So I just gave them three cliche personality types, Coward, Reasonable, Doubtful. My next project will hopefully have much more development in both character and plot. Thanks for the review!

[Dufflebag Dud]

Decent

But there is just no substance. It has potential. (Even as disturbing as that is) Maybe focus on the art style you've got here and make something original out of it.

Instead of going for what seems (to me) like a half assed attempt at humoring a terrible event, and make a fully assed attempt at an original comedy. Lol

Don't get me wrong, it wasn't aweful, it just needed more work. The whole rush thing probably kept if from being any better.

Anywho, keep up the work! =3

-Review Request Club

Snaws responds:

i might thnkz.....

[Dodraugen]

Sorry dude, but it need some work.

1.) Why is there a boombox in his bathroom? lol

2.) The "bathroom" looks like a living room or something.

3.) The background for the pipes look like they're from "The elder Scrolls 4: Oblivion" and that should be noted. If it isn't, then tell us where thay are from.

4.) The build up to the monster jumping out was timed kinda funny (not funny, "haha" but the other kind) because it ended up not being very scary, since you can expect it to be jumping out. A surprise needs to be surprising, we shouldn't know whats coming till it happens.

5.) Maybe start a bit earlier on the projects so you can get more detailed with the work.

Sorry about the criticalness, but it's better to be critical, than to just say, "OMG THIS SUCKED BALLS" or, "DUDE was awesome" or even, "It startled me, and still does." as one of the "reviewers" pointed out lol

Anyways keep on trying, you'll do just fine. =3

-Review Request Club

Assios responds:

The reason why there is a boombox in the bathroom and that the bathroom looks like a living room, is that I am also working on a big project, and since I had to make this in a few hours to upload it on Halloween , I used one of the backrounds and the boombox from that other movie ;P Yup, the background for the pipes is from Oblivion. And yeah, this did not turn out as well as it could if I used more time on it. Should've started earlier, but then again, I am working on a larger project, so it had to be this short if I was gonna upload something for Halloween ;P

Thanks for your review! ^^